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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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This was a lot of fun to judge. Thanks a bunch, dude : )
No problem! I'd love to have you judge again in the future!
Um...I don't want to be critical because I know both you and Sami put a lot of work into this but the story seems kind of..rushed to me. >>; Sketch is meant to be the star, of course, but it feels as if everyone else should have gotten just a little bit more than they did...Poor Rory only got a "And you!" lD; XD; It was also kind of hard to understand what was going on at some points. >>;
On the other hand, the puns were amazing. XDD
No that's fine. I love critique. You have a fair point in saying it's rushed. The other characters should have had more exposition. My initial script was made purely with the idea that after Sami's ending, it would be Matt and Sketch leaving the Mind, and seeing the other ideas leave, including Rory, Despar, and Graphy. They would all leave, with Sketch being pulled into the Parallel, as the finale was to revolve around her. Since completion, I have reread this several times, looking for what I could have done better. So any advice and critique is great, because it helps me make better scripts in the future. As for understanding what was going on, I feel I should have given more "establishment" shots, as in some sort of panel that would give more insight to what was happening.
What's done is done, but I can only look at the mistakes and improve from there. While the script seemed fine at first, I now realize that I could have fleshed out the "escape" scene a bit. Maybe a better exchange between characters like Matt and Rory. More of an acknowledgment of all they've been through.
So yeah thank you for the critique, and if you have any advice on what to do next time let me know.
Honestly, yes.
But yeah. ^^ Happy to be of any help. It's still a fun way to end a fun OCT.